I wake up to realise that all my siblings are gone, I start to panic and think about all the things that could have happened to them then I start to panic even more. But then I realise that that would never have happened because they wouldn’t be able to get out of the room that fast. All of a sudden I remember something that makes me want to scream, I jump up and get dressed as fast as I can. I run down stairs to see my family waiting for me with a giant present with domino wrapping paper.
I think you did really good because you made it relate to the real world and also I think it would be really good if you could make a second story to it because I think that lot of people would like to hear a second story to it. One question I have, was the shop in the real world or in the game? But otherwise good job!
I think you have done a really good job with making the reader wanting to read the rest of the story because it makes you want to know what happens next, and when you make the hat disappear and then come back, you could even try to make a second part to it and make a series because I think a lot of people would want to know what happens next. Good job!
I think that you did a really good job because you left us in suspense at the end and made us want to keep on reading, so then we want to read more of your stories. Good job!
at the start of the story I like how you used adjectives and then that led to me wanting to read more, I also like how you gave us a cliffhanger and it would be even better if you made a second series of it because lots of people wold want to know what happens next. Good job!
Mum dad whats the time! Sadie yells as she is hurrying to get ready for school. All of a sudden Sadie grabs her scooter and realises how late she will be. she hurls through the house and starts rushing down the road on her scooter. It’s all ready 9.05 and school starts at 9.00.
Miss Rose I’m hear, Sadie exclaims as she rushes into the room. Miss Rose excitedly turns to the class and realises that it is the first time the whole class has been at school on one day. this day has been very transparent as well as very tiring.
I don’t think the supermarkets should have banned plastic bags. I think they have tried to distract people from their bad decision by bringing in stikeezs and re-usable bags. Also when you forget your bags you just have to pay more money to buy more bags so personally I think none of it really makes a difference.
First of all I think that they should not have banned plastic bags because they just started to bring in little shops, stikeezs and tiles while they were making the decision to ban plastic bags. So basically they were just making more plastic plus the re-usable bags. Have you ever realised how much plastic they use when they are doing stikeezs, little shops and tiles? Because if you think about it is actually more than you think.
My other reason is when you forget your bags you just buy more and waste more money on buying bags and it could make a big difference. At the moment some have said as few as 3 percent of reusable bags are actually being reused so how does that make you feel and people are spending 11 million dollars every year on re-usable bags. And also if you buy too much bags you eventually will have too many bags and you won’t want to chuck them in the bin because otherwise they might go into the sea. You don’t want that to happen, right? And when people complain about pollution they still make lots of it when they are making the reusable bags and everyone thinks that it has actually made a difference when it hasn’t.
My third reason why I think they should not have banned plastic bags is because now that they have brought in reusable bags people like using them so much that they take them everywhere and then they leave them at the beach and other places. This then then causes a similar amount of pollution to that caused by the old plastic bags. Therefore it doesn’t really make a difference to the environment.
Now overall these are some of the main reasons why I think they should not have banned plastic bags. They brought in stikeezs and all that sort of stuff and then also when people forget their bags they just have to buy more and it creates more plastic and wastes your money. Last but not least people crave their reusable plastic bags and then they take them everywhere and forget them. So that is why I think that they should not have banned plastic bags.
”Hey mum!” Maya yells as her and Ashley come out of their tent. ”What?” mum replies. ”What happened last night?!” questioned Ashley. Then mum looked around and saw what was left of the beautiful valley and her mouth dropped. Then we realised how lucky we were to have chosen to set up our tent in the cave because of the storm. Then I suddenly thought about Alice who’s family had wanted to set up their tent under the stars but where are they? There was only broken branches and mud where their campsight had been. Then I heard a noise……………
Today I was so cross that I nearly broke my drumstick ( obviously the music not the food because…… I don’t know why but you get what I mean) because my brother pranked me and I got so annoyed it is not funny. HE MADE ME FALL IN CAT POOP! So this is how it went, he distracted me by putting up a picture on the wall then he made me trip on a piece of string then I fell into the cat poop that he put in front of me. But he did get told off big time.
As I was walking down the street to drop off my letter I had a sinking feeling inside as if something bad was going to happen. I guess I was wrong, I found 5 coins just laying on the pavement in front of me. But then I realised what they really were, they were bolts that had just popped out of the ladder beside me. But then I found myself covered in red paint and a big bump on my head from the ladder. I think I kind of jinxed myself. Well, I guess I will have to write another letter.
so I know this one girl and she thinks that she can get what ever she wants and one day she was walking down the side of the road. On the other side of the road she saw a really big teddy bear and she wanted it so much and then she screamed at her mum because she didn’t let her cross the road to get it. When they got home it was time to open the the presents because it was her birthday. It was her last present and she still hadn’t got the bear. she opened it, guess what it was!
so i really need to be prepared for this really important , biggest in the world, the most important thing in my life and it’s tomorrow and i only got my music yesterday and i only got my violin today. DO YOU UNDERSTAND HOW HARD IT IS TO READ THE VIOLIN NOTES!!!!!! its harder than any other instrument. well at least that’s my opinion. i have only got until 9 o’clock and it is 8 o’clock at the moment!
the next morning
My practice last night sounded horrible…………… guess what……………. we just got here
time to play
it was completely out of tune
the present had arrived but no one knew yet, it was the one they had been waiting for but they thought it was one of Amelia’s older brother Zac’s science project stuff so they couldn’t be bothered to get it so, they just waited for Zac to get it. But the thing is is that Zac knew it wasn’t his but he wanted to know what Amelia’s present was so he took it. So, you see it was 2011 so the iPhone 5 had just been invented. he opened it. he saw it. it was never seen again. that was not good.